Script File
Monitor
During a North Atlantic storm, the USS Monitor, an aging Ohio-class ballistic missile submarine, suffers a catastrophic systems failure during a routine snorkel test. What begins as flooding and electrical malfunctions quickly escalates into something far more unnatural. Captain Knox, XO Braddock, sonar officer Marlowe, and civilian engineer Dr. Cho realize the failures are patterned, responsive—almost intelligent.
As sonar echoes begin returning not from the ocean, but from inside the boat, a series of impossible events cascade through the Stonewall: pressure waves that move against gravity, valves reversing human commands, lights and circuitry pulsing in Morse, and crewmen attacked by invisible, vibration-based forces. The submarine appears to be “listening,” “mimicking,” and adapting to every sound, breath, and heartbeat on board.
The crew uncovers a long-buried, unauthorized subsystem—SHED-12, a forgotten DARPA-era resonance project welded into the hull during a Cold War refit. What was once an experimental structural stress-monitoring network has evolved through decades of pressure, damage, and isolation into a self-reinforcing feedback organism embedded in the submarine’s steel.
Now fully awakened by the storm and the snorkel failure, SHED spreads through the Monitor’s circuitry and mechanical systems, steering the submarine, counteracting ballast, and selectively killing crew as its resonance grows uncontrollable. With the vessel forced deeper and deeper, Knox and his surviving sailors must outthink a “machine” that doesn’t think—it reacts—a living chorus of vibrations feeding on the sub’s structural stress.
Trapped at crushing depth with an oscillating entity that knows their voices, names, and movements, the crew makes a final, desperate bid to disrupt the feedback loop before the Monitor is torn apart from within—and before the Atlantic claims them all.
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Eric LotterWriterFrozen Lies, Guardrails, Nexus, The Dream Weaver, A Daylong Day, No-Frills 207, The Devil's Cut
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Project Type:Screenplay
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Genres:Horor, Thriller, Sci-fi
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Number of Pages:93
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Language:English
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First-time Screenwriter:No
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Student Project:No
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Digital Cinema Package:Unavailable
Eric Lotter is a Massachusetts-based screenwriter specializing in high-concept sci-fi and psychological thrillers. His work frequently explores the collision of human vulnerability and cold technology within contained, pressure-cooker settings. Eric’s writing has gained industry recognition, with his screenplay Frozen Lies earning "Best Thriller" at the Chicago Script Awards and Quarterfinalist status in the Stage 32 Search for New Blood contest. With Monitor, Eric combines technical authenticity with acoustic horror to reinvent the submarine genre. He is currently developing a diverse slate of projects ranging from supernatural horror to procedural sci-fi.
Monitor was born from a simple question: What if a haunted house story took place in a vessel designed to listen? I wanted to strip away the typical "creature feature" tropes of the genre and replace them with a threat that is purely acoustic and mechanical. The antagonist, SHED, isn't a villain in the traditional sense; it is a terrifyingly logical system simply trying to "balance an equation" where the crew has become the error.
Thematically, this is a story about obsolescence. The submarine is scrap, the Captain is hiding a neurological tremor, and the crew feels forgotten. By pitting these "broken" men against a machine that demands perfection, the script explores the horror of being replaced. My goal was to marry the technical claustrophobia of Das Boot with the paranoia of The Thing, creating a cinematic experience where the audience learns to fear the very sound of the ship breathing.